Melanie is training one night with her boyfriend Don. The husky girl wants to lose some weight and get in better shape so she’ll look better compared to the other BSF girls. She doesn’t know that, lurking in the shadows, one of the BSF girls is waiting to hurt her in a very intimate way.
AMAZING! This was an incredibly hot story, and I loved all the callbacks! The rivalry between Melanie and Caribe has so much depth and both characters are so well defined and each with their own motivation…I love the character beat with Melanie’s body image issues (however invalid they may be to Don or any of us, they’re still very real to her) and the way the League girls keep picking at them and exasperating them, and how she’s chosen to deal with that, and I love the character beat with Caribe’s low self esteem of late and how Melanie was responsible for that and how she’s decided to deal with it…this may be one of your most character motivated sexfights ever! Can’t wait to see how this is resolved next week!
Melanie has grown into a really great character, and I love her design…she really pushes my buttons, but even beyond the physical, her character really appeals to me. I find something really sexy about vulnerable girls, which may be why I gravitate towards Melanie, Prudie, and Megan, though you’ve done a pretty great job of giving every BWL girl some kind of flaw or hangup that informs on their character (Jenn jumps to mind, with her cold nature and mean streak, and her perchant for measuring her self worth against others). Great work all around!
Agree with Foreshadow here, great work, particularly how you have made Melanie so distinct from the other girls in design and attitude – look forward to seeing much more of her.